Monday, October 11, 2010

In Media Res -Journal 3

Phillip, the engineer grabbed the two bottles of martini that stood attractively next to him and drank his problems away to death. The next day, Flight 29 landed on the greenest grasses in New Zealand by accident carrying 329 passengers. With phillip to blame for not ensuring that there was enough fuel in the tank, everyone faces turned upside down and they filled the plane with tears. Suddenly, a dark skinned man, with no muscles and sea blue overalls on walked up to the pilot and said "I can fix this". The pilot asked for his name and he pointed to his crooked name tag that said "Eric, pool cleaning services". Eventually, after all awkwardness was finished, he climbed onto the back of the plane and poured two different types of cleaning agent that made the engine restart and the plane continued its journey.

1 comment:

  1. What was the conflict? You removed Phillip too easily...focus on how these two characters could be struggling with one another..otherwise, where will your story go?
    8/10

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